Untitled at this moment (suggestions for title welcome)

[Danksmoke]

I of the bleeding smile
I of the soul defiled
I of this breathing world
Viewed through dilated eyes
Singing reptilian songs
With venom-laced serpents tongue
Observing all, externally
Not belonging, all along

Deny life, Forsake thyself
Reflections of blank eyes staring back
With no emotion
Nor recognition
Just bad intentions

[David John Neff]

it is good obvously unfinished i disagree with her choice of title it is a well used title but if you were to call it the same as the first line i of the bleeding smile would deffinately catch attention

[2XChromos]

Not bad, not bad at all, I think it's awesome to be quite frank. Kudos =)

As far as a title.... Hmmm.. Well for me, a title is so personal that I hate to make a suggestion and it may not "feel" right to you... But perhaps... My Soul Defiled? Okay, that sounds terrible! But I only say that because when I read it, I can really relate to it and that is how I feel sometimes and your poem summed it up brilliantly, well done.

Or you could just go wit the poster above me, because I really like those first three lines the MOST. I, of the bleeding smile...